Limbo
As the sound of the crash died down, I followed the light at the end of the tunnel. Moving slowly, I floated weightless toward the future.
Everything changed in a blinding flash, when that Kenworth crossed the median and slammed into my car. Sounds of bending metal and breaking glass echoed across the mountainside.
Time stopped instantly. Now, ‘on this day without a date, on a back street, dusky,’ my course seemed to change. The light seemed to fad into dusky street lamps. I am again floating once more toward the traffic light up ahead that turned to caution as I came to it.
Now I am in the mountains sitting beside a beautiful flowing stream. Sunlight gleamed on the ripples. I wanted to stay there forever.
Suddenly, I took a big gasp and heard voices saying, ”Dwight, can you hear me!”
“Breathe!”
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Photo: Dwight L. Roth
Posting on Lisa’s d’Verse prosery prompt. We must write a flash fiction of not more than 144 words. We must use a given poetic line in our story. The line she gave us was, ‘on this day without a date, on a back street, dusky’ from poet
— Charles Simic, from My Friend Someone
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Oh yes, the near-death experience. I’m fascinated with these. Um, did this really happen to you, Dwight?
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No, it is flash fiction. Thanks for your comment. Glad it connected with you.
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Whew! You had me worried 😟
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Oh so well written Dwight.
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Thank you so much Sadje for your kind words!
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My pleasure
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I loved your near death experience spin on the lines of poetry, Dwight. There is a feel of truth to this even though it is fiction.
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People have all kinds of experiences when these intances occur. It was a fun write! Thanks for the interesting prompt.
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I saw a netflix doc on NDEs and I’m glad they survived it but many remain troubled by it, which is very unfortunate. I like how you imagined it would be and hope it is like that. You are welcome on the prompt.
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You are right those kinds of experiences can be very troubling. Hope I don’t have to experience any of them.
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Great prosery, I was hooked from the start.
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Thanks Jay. It is quite a story!
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Nicely done
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You got me there. I would have asked the same question. Amazing bit of fiction Dwight.
Thanks for dropping by my blog.
Much💖love
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Thank you Gillena. I am glad you enjoyed it.
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Well done, Dwight! A great take on the prompt.
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Thank you so much. I am glad you enjoyed it.
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You’re welcome, Dwight!
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Wow! A taste of heaven. Good one!
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Thanks Susan. I am glad you enjoyed it.
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A very effective piece of flash!
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Thank you Liz! I have been learning about people’s near death experiences lately!
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You’re welcome, Dwight!
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A prosery tale of survival ~~~ I love it!
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Thank you Helen! I am so glad you enjoyed it.
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love your flash fiction that sounds very true to reality from others I’ve heard of Dwight.. Nice job! 💞
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Thank you so much Cindy. I I have heard of similar experiences. Very dreamlike!
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Not much stands a chance if tangling like that with a big rig. I had a student who was still recovering from a head on crash with his motorcycle. He doesn’t remember a thing that happened that whole day, as was the case of my BIL who nosedived his airplane into the ground. Must be a phenomenon common, your writer may have also suffered the lapse in memory.
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Yes, you are right about that. This could be the surprise for the next paragraph, if my words hand not been cut off! Thank you for your thoughtful comment.
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Wow! What a great piece, had me holding my breath for a second! 🙂
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Wonderful. Thank you for your great comment.
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Quite the twist, nicely done, Dwight! 💞💞💞
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Thank you very much.
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