Scars of a Broken Heart

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It was a warm Sunday afternoon. Jim took a small hand-ax with him as he climbed the ridge behind her farm. They had been friends since primary school, but now, seven years later she had broken his heart. Tommy Butler beat him to the draw, asking Julie Anne to the middle school dance… and she said yes.

With all his strength he chopped at the initials carved into the side of the tall sugar maple. He carved them there when he was thirteen. Now it was a bleeding scar where a heart of love once lived.

When Jim, told George what he had done, a smile crossed his wise old, wrinkled face.

“When I was your age, I had a girl who broke my heart as well. She played with my heart, then ‘she’d had it sliced away leaving a scar’. It still hurts.”

Photo: Dwight L. Roth

Today at d’Verse, Sarah asked us to write a prosery story of 144 words, which must include the line: ‘she’d had it sliced away leaving a scar’. from a poem by Michael Donaghy. (

I decided to continue my conversations of Jim and his friend Old George.

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73 thoughts on “Scars of a Broken Heart

  1. Love me some dialogue; great way to share the tale. In high school, I fell in love with a cheerleader, but I went out with anyone who agreed to go; pragmatic, I guess.

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  2. Most timely post! I fell yesterday and have 8 stitches leaving a scar in my scalp. Scars occur for many reasons. Some visible-some hidden in the hair – some invisible – but they all teach us a lesson. Mine is one the Lord keeps repeating: Slow down & watch where you’re going! It’s as hard to do today as it was in my youth!

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  3. The tree seems to have suffered the most. I love your story. It’s so hard to write something that’s complete in 144 words but you manage to do it, and so beautifully too. The first heart break is always the hardest.

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