Today I patched potholes in the street
Filling cracks // stretchmarks growing wider
Black sticky tar // thick as nutty pudding
Seals the holes and slows deterioration
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Our life is like road paved and sweet
We live like it will last forever
But pavement cracks and potholes widen
from our activities and endless recreation
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Some seek to just pave over // making everything neat
Without fixing personal issues they hide her
When troubles come from their past that’s hidden
Life’s pavement crumbles from disillusion
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So, keep life’s road protected from the heat
And from foul and nasty weather
Avoid division // help relationships widen
Address life’s potholes // sealed with occlusion
Sanaa at d’Verse, challenged us to write from French poetic history.
“Today we will delve deep into the French poetic form “Rima Dissolutas.” Popular with 12th and 13th century French poets, rimas dissolutas is a poem that rhymes and doesn’t rhyme.
For instance, each stanza contains no end rhymes, but each line in each stanza rhymes with the corresponding line in the next stanza–sometimes employing an envoi at the end.”
I had to wait a day to get this one to work for me. Today my friend Peter helped me patch some potholes in our neighborhood. A few neighbors donated to the cause, and we purchased and used 7 bags of asphalt mix in the holes and cracks. This gave me the inspiration for today’s poem. I hope I have the form correct.
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Nice one, Dwight! You did this perfectly. ❤
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Thank you, Lucy! I appreciate your kind words.
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A very apt metaphor!
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Thank you, Liz! It seemed that way to me.
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You’re welcome, Dwight.
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You have a talent for making connections and creating poetic metaphors and apparently for fixing potholes in the street. A man with many talents!
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I have always been a fixit man it seems. Something I love to do. Very rewarding when it is done and appreciated by the neighbors. Thanks Michele!
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It is rare, but wonderful to have neighbors who take care of things and help others, like you!
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I am helping myself as well. Sort of like light a candle instead of cursing the pothole! :>)
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Absolutely. Better to use our talents to do something helpful then complain and do nothing. 👏🏻 The world needs more people and neighbors like you!
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Thank you for your kind words, Michele!
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A good metaphor for facing our challenges in life. Good for you and your friend to work on those potholes!
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Thank you, Grace. Those potholes seem to just keep on coming! The DOT just throws tar and gravel in the holes, and they come right back.
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Whether the form is correct or not, the message is right on! I have noticed how “Some seek to just pave over [mistakes] making everything neat” while never bothering to fix the underlying messiness. Eventually the mess rises to the surface, though, don’t you think?
Without fixing personal issues
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Yes it does… they become the potholes of our lives and take a lot of work to patch! Thank you, Jan, I am glad this one resonated with you.
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It sure did!
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Very interesting poetic form, Dwight. It looks like you got it right. Thank you for the explanation. ❤
Do you work in Florida? There is a pothole in the service road behind our drugstore big enough to swallow a car!
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Ha ha…. perhaps for a fee of the right astronomical number! This was a tough one for me to find my muse on. Took me a day and some hard work to get there. Thanks Cheryl.
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Metaphor and form are spot on…and sealed up!! 😄👏👏
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Ha ha… we hope so… only time will tell! Thank you so much!
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Sage advice, Dwight. I’m grateful for your wisdom and the desire to care well for whatever roads lie ahead of me and behind.
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Thank you so much for your comment!
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Loved the philosophy in the first Stanza!
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Thank you so much!
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An inspiring poem, Dwight, thank you!
Joanna
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Thank you Joanna!
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You used those potholes well
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Thank you. Derrick. It is amazing how catching them early saves a lot of work later down the road!
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We have loads you could try 🙂
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Seems that is true universally! :>)
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Such a powerful allegory…
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Thank you so much! I enjoyed your great post as well. Those memories are wonderful!
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Papering over the cracks is never quite enough, is it? They need to be properly repaired!
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That is right! It never seems to last! Thank you Ingrid.
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Gorgeously rendered, Dwight! 💝💝 I agree, it’s important to address and deal with life’s potholes. Thank you so much for adding your voice to the prompt 🙂
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Thank you and you are welcome!
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I love how this serves as an amazing metaphor between the road and life! The imagery is connected and visually clear.
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Thank you so much! I thought so too! I appreciate your comment.
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Wonderful! I do like the metaphor you used 💫
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Thank you so much for your comment!
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Nice metaphor Dwight – you work it well here…
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Thank you very much Scott. I appreciate your comment.
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Such wisdom here Dwight! So many learn too late.
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Thank you Mary. I agree and some never learn!
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great metaphors Dwight.
At least you don’t have the huge pot holes like last year… 👏👏👏
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You are right. If you catch them early, they are much easier to contain.
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Absolutely and that’s across the board! 💖👏👏
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This rimas dissolutas applies one of the most practical metaphors I have read to address one of the most fundamental denials in life. your patchwork cracks me up!
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Thank you very much Sean. I appreciate your comment.
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Dwight, it’s more than obvious the hard work out into the potholes and poetry! What a beautiful illustration of how to get things done! Thank you!
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Thank you so much! It was quite a leap! :>)
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You’re welcome! You did it! 👏🏻
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Great analogy Dwight, and also a very worthy community contribution! We expect council to fix our potholes, a bit like so many who relinquish responsibility for their weak spots …
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Thanks Kate! We get tired of hitting them and the DOT doing a sorry patch that only lasts about two weeks.
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smart fellows, do it yourself and it should last a bit longer!
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Yes, we get bags of asphalt mix at the local Building Supply Store and it is much better.
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What a great metaphor Dwight, loved reading it.
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Thank you so much!
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You’re most welcome!
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Well done. both roads and life needs a bit of patching every now and then,
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Thank you, Bjorn. Yes they do!
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A perfect metaphor, Dwight. Poem works beautifully!
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Thank you so much Sara!
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So deep❤
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Thank you!
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look for a Randy Newman song…”God Bless the Potholes on Memory Lane”…👍👍👍
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Ha ha… That is a good one! I guess we all hit a few at times. It helps if we learn to drive around them.
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