Today at d’Verse, Frank asked us to take a quote from a favorite poem and write an imitation poem in the exact same style. I chose the following quote from T. S. Elliot…“The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock”
“I grow old … I grow old …
I shall wear the bottoms of my trousers rolled.
Shall I part my hair behind? Do I dare to eat a peach?
I shall wear white flannel trousers, and walk upon the beach.”
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This is my rewrite:
I grow bold … I grow bold …
I shall shave the round top of my bald head cold.
Shall I trim around my ears? Do I dare to wax my chest?
I shall dress in old cargo pants, and set out on my quest.
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This is a fun rewrite, good job!
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Thank you so much!
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Lots of fun! But also, echoes of the cult of youth – how do we recapture it? Probably not by waxing our chests…
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Ha Ha! you are right about that! You know the old saying … you are as young as you think! The body does not always get the message!
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A great rewrite Dwight, I especially love how you’ve replaced ‘growing old’ with ‘growing bold’!😁
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Thanks Xena! Grow bold …… or go home!! :>)
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It is an extension, rather than imitation 🙂 Very well done!
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Thank you! It could fit right in to the poem.
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It did beautifully!
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Very nice imitation. I like the shaving one’s bald head cold and the final setting off on one’s quest.
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Still positive in my old age!!
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Thanks!!
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sounds like a plan! (K)
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Ha Ha~ Yes it does!
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Your version is cool. 😎
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Thank you. I appreciate your comment!
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Hahaha! I like both of them!!
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I love your version… and also how much it resemble our world today when we refuse of ever growing old.
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Thank you so much! Yes, I think it is funny to see older men with shaved legs and chest. Makes them look like they just came through chemo!!
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I love. Your humor,
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Thank you! I thought the original was rather funny as well.
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