Two falling stars in a universe of billions
Sometimes clashing like two knives cutting
Bleeding rightness // then finding we are wrong
Seeking forgiveness //pledging to get along
Entangled in the night like the roots of a tree
Holding on to the foundation that keeps us free
We are two bodies // waves of ebb and flow
In an ocean of night, as days come and go
Age brings with it // fossils // embedded in stone
Looking back with nostalgia as the sun sets all alone
We are pieces of the universe on collision course
When two falling stars embedded with great force
Forever lie together in the dust of the earth
Today at d’Verse we are looking at international poetry. It is easy for poetry intent to get lost in translation. Lara gave us poems from three different international poets and asked us to pick one that inspired us and write it in our own perspective. I chose, Two Bodies, by the Mexican poet Octavio Paz. You can read the original version below:
Octavio Paz (1914-1998) – Another Spanish speaker and more recent Nobel prize winner. Born in Mexico, he was a political activist, ambassador and essayist so that much of his poetry reads like prose poems, “written within the perpetual motion and transparencies of the eternal present tense.”
Two Bodies
Two bodies face to face
are at times two waves
and night is an ocean.
Two bodies face to face
are at times two stones
and night a desert.
Two bodies face to face
are at times two roots
laced into night.
Two bodies face to face
are at times two knives
and night strikes sparks.
Two bodies face to face
are two stars falling
in an empty sky.
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Painting: Dwight L. Roth
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Two bodies
Two sides of the earth
Two people
One birth
Two hearts
One mind
She’s my daughter
Love binds.
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Yes! very good… put in on the d’Verse site!
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I’ll see if I can figure out how to do that. Thanks!
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:>)
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Beautiful!
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Thank you Mary!
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very different to other takes on this one but really love yours, it resonates deeply … ‘waves of ebb and flow”, “collision course”
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Thanks Kate! The realities of life are always with us!
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yes wiser to know them for what they are 🙂
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This put tears in my eyes Dwight. Touching, tender, heartfelt — beautiful!
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Thank you Rob! I am so glad it connected with you!! I always appreciate your comments!
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you gave the two bodies wonderful souls and yet kept the erotic – beautifully painted
“Entangled in the night like the roots of a tree”
and the ending is superb.
Thank you for joining in Dwight – you can call me Laura!
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Thank you Lara! I appreciate your kind assessment of my poem. It was a very interesting challenge!
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Great words! I love the metaphor of the two falling stars.
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Thank you. It seems to work well with his poem.
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This is a wonderful and complete love story from beginning to end…
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Thank you so much! I tried to incorporate all that was in the original one.
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re rothpoetry, I believe this is a favorite of mine. Well done, Dwight.
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Such a beautiful story of the ebb and flow of a long relationship, the journey ending in final rest side by side. Lovely write!
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Thanks Beverly. I loved the ideas from the original poem and tried to incorporate them into my poem.
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Seeking forgiveness … that eternal rhythm of relationship of any kind, and the force of relationship, so deeply embedded, the depth of love, captures for the centrifugal and centripetal nature of two.
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Yes! That is exactly what it is all about! …from beginning to end! Thank you so much!
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My pleasure Dwight.
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We are all composed of the same elements…(K)
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Dust to dust!!
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