A sonnet consists of 14 lines structured into two parts. The first part gives an “argument” and the second part a “solution” separated by a “volta” (a turn), in the italian sonnet the argument consists of the first octet leaving the last sextet for the resolution. Today at d’Verse Poets Pub, Bjorn introduced us to different forms of the sonnet. I am attempting to write my first Italian sonnet. It includes my thoughts on aging in this winter time of my life.
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Jilly asked us to use enjambment, which is punctuation that reflects the meaning we want to project. This is my revised version with punctuation added.
In this gray, leafless winter time of life;
When reflection dominates my thinking;
And, age blankets memory; snowy, cold, twinkling;
Covering over old pain, hurt, and strife.
Forgetting past, and sometimes the present,
I contemplate my future things to come.
Will old age smile on the end of my run;
Or, can I peacefully pass on content?
Life still goes on, independent of us,
New changes will come, without our consent;
All I can do is watch, and make a fuss;
But, if I have no choice about this chatter,
Why should I worry, or fret with resentment?
To stay, or leave, does not really matter.
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Powerful piece Dwight, deeply felt. I understand reflections of this type. With every year they visit. Staying now, as long as I can, has become my focus – the result of living with my 5-year-old grandson. But to the world in general, “to stay or leave does not really matter”.
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Thank you Rob for your thoughtful comments. Grandchildren really are an incentive to keep on living as long as we can. My issues come in living on without being able to live. Confined living is not a very good option for me!
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I hear you Dwight. I am not getting around like I used to, but still getting around. Sorry my friend if mibility is a challenge. No fun…
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I hope, that in the winter of my life, I am reflecting and writing like this.
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Don’t ever stop making a fuss…..or writing poetry. 😉
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You are right! both are important for healthy living!! Thanks!
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Quite lovely.
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Thank you Tara! It was an interesting challenge!
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Nice line: “All I can do is watch and make a fuss”
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The story of our lives!!
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I think we should all try to make some noise even in the winter of our lives… love the mix of masculine and feminine rhymes that breaks the rhythm and makes it softer.
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Thank you Bjorn. This is totally new for me! It has been an interesting challenge. Yes noisy all the way into the dark night that follows!
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Rage rage against the night… 🙂
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Yes!
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Well done, Dwight.
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Thanks Ken!
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Bravo! yes, what does it matter if we leave or stay as long as neither is of our own doing.
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No need to fret… live life to the full and keep on writing!
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Well done Dwight!
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Thanks Linda. I appreciate your kind words.
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God-willing, I still have some years before I reach winter. When that time comes, I hope to have this serenity.
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Thank you Imelda!
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Beautiful and touching 🙂
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Thank you so much!
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your reflections are so well paced Dwight, and at the end of this wonderful sonnet a realisation that no matter what we do, there’s a certainty of fate. your voice matters though, you never know the hearts it can touch.
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Thank you Gina. Yes, we live life to the full… knowing that in time it all will change! I always appreciate your kind words.
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Interesting reflection — certainly no one wants to hear the whining as we fall apart. And new sparkling thing replace us inevitably, so griping about it is pathetic. But it is so tempting. Instead, to find pleasure in no simple things is our effort — as you have in writing poetry. I enjoyed your insight and writing.
BTW
If I understand correctly, the Petrarchan rhyme is:
ABBA ABBA CDC CDC
But your second stanza and your fourth stanza’s don’t match those prior:
ABBA CDDC EFE GHG
not that it matters — “Why should I worry or fret ” 😉
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Thank you, Sabio. I am one who struggles with all the changes as I grow older. I guess that is just the natural course of things.
I am new at writing poetry by the book. This is the first I have tried Sonnets. Perhaps I will consider my version as poetic license! :>) Thank you for your comments.
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I think your sonnet has a meaningful message that needs to be heard and rules are made to be broken once in a while.
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I think Bjorn gave us free reign when it came to technical form.
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I thought your sonnet worked well, Dwight – the instructions did give us many options. As we age, we ponder things youth never have to worry about. Well said.
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This is really well written, Dwight. The voice is quite effective!
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Thank you Jilly, I appreciate your help! I appreciate your kind affirmation!
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This reads wonderfully with meaning Dwight. This is my favorite part:
Will old age smile on the end of my run;
Or, can I peacefully pass on content?
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Thank you Grace. One always wonders how things will end for us…. hoping wishing will make it better!
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I’ve comeback to read your enjambment. Damned well done my friend! Engaging both ways. I had to write the new sonnet I posted to try the enjambment.
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Thank you Rob! You are too kind! I had do some research to get my grammer right. It has been a long time. I will check your sonnet out as well.
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Lyrical framing of the questions, really great Dwight.
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Thank you Lona. I appreciate your comments.
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Definitely the sorts of thoughts that the winters of the year and life create. Slowing down, time to reflect. (K)
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Thank you… I am getting too close to this for comfort! I run some of this through my mind from time to time.
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Nice sonnet. I have tried writing a few, but I never realized the last 6 lines were meant to give an answer to the first 8 lines. Today I learned something. =D
– Joey Blue
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Thank you so much for reading and taking time to comment! It is a difficult form for sure. I am trying to stretch myself and try some new things in my old age! :>)
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I don’t know your age (and your picture is very tiny on my computer), but that’s how you stay young!
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I am turning 72 next week! Hard to believe it has been that many years. Some days I feel it and get reminded!! :>)
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I’m sure you’re only as old as you feel!
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Yes that varies from day to day! LOL
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