Fishers come with hook and beak
Lunch is found in Hammer Creek
One sits dangling on the shore
Heron dives // comes back for more
Frank is challenging us to try the Tanaga form of poetry, for our d’Verse poetry group. It consists of four lines with seven syllables in each line. It has a rhyming pattern. It usually has no title, since the lines of the verse should make clear what is being said. This is my first attempt at writing a Tanaga poem. The heron in the photo is a Great White Egret. They often nest in the Susquehanna Valley region of Pennsylvania.
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Photos from Hammer Creek near Clay, Pennsylvania. – Dwight L. Roth
It has a nice rythm and pace. One can sing it easily. Like a folk song. 🙂
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Thank you Peter… Frank said Mary had a little Lamb has the tanks meter. Maybe it is sort of like that! :>)
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Very nice sound and sense in your tanaga. I think your tanaga is perfect.
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Thanks Frank! I take that as a great compliment!
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You can tell I am new at this one… I had it mixed up with a Tanka instead of a Tanaga! LOL
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This is great! Love to see heron
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Thank you Mary! The heron was a sight to behold.
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Tanaga is perfect. Photos shine! Great work, Dwight.
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Thank Charlie!
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You’re welcome.
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Good fishing for both I hope. I’ll be the heron does better. I like the rhyming of the meter. It seems to kind of flow well with the meter. I caught a blue heron once, when he dove in for my lure. Liked to have been beaked before we got him free.
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Thanks Walter! I am with you the heron out fishes the man everytime! Not to many people hook a heron! LOL
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He was mighty hard to reldase, He never fished near us again
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I can imagine!
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Well done Roth! God bless you! Keep em poems coming! 😇🙌💯🔥👊
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Thanks! I appreciate your comments!
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You’re welcome much!
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Hammer Creek sounds and looks lovely, Dwight. I think I’d prefer heron spotting to fishing, though. You’ve definitely nailed the form!
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Thanks Kim, I really appreciate your comments. Hammer Creek is a beautiful spot.
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Great images; the feet, the fishermen of both ilks. The break in the last line is a nice choice – very effective. Bravo!
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Thank you so much Jilly! I really appreciate your kind comments.
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How are you able to get so many images of nature!
Where I live, its just concrete, concrete, concrete…….
Its so bad, that when I went to write a poem about it, it took 400 words…….
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I live next to a woods with many trees and birds all around. I also take photos when I travel.
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That is so amazing!
I used to dream when I was little that I lived by the wood but you are actually doing it!
Must be wonderful…..
Also you are excellent at photography
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I have a good camera with a long lens. I hang the bird feeders close to my window, so it makes for great pictures.
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I think the heron might be more successful
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Yes!
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Cool! 🙂
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Wonderful!
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Thank You!
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Beautiful combination of words and visuals.
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Thank you Astrid!
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Loved this tanaga…with perfect imagery too. Wish I had the time to hang about like the fisherman.
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All in due time!! Thank Vivian!
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😊
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I really like the sing-song quality to your piece!
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Beautiful!
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A good day of fishing to have caught a poem and seen a heron. Nice!
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Thank you so much. The photos and the poem came almost a year apart!
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Smiling….yup…humans have all the paraphanalia for fishing and as they bait their line or sue their lure, that heron just swoops down and does it all! 🙂
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Thank you Lillian! Birds win all the time!
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A lesson learnt from the master fisher — now that must be a big catch. Curious to know: did you manage to fetch your lunch at the end? Nice metre and caesura. Bravo.
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Thank you so much Colin. No I went away with something more lasting…photos and memories. I was very lucky to get these shots. I was shooting photos of the old mill and the mill pond and all of a sudden this beautiful Great Egret rose up out of the marsh grass along the mill pond. It was definitely the best catch of the day!! Thank you!
Dwight
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oooh…. another short form to add to my collection.
Tanaga!
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This was new for me from the d’verse poetry pub group.
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I just posted there… using the Tanaga… which I guess I had used before since it came up in my tag section… This one might be new for you though: Pied?
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I have seen this style before, but have not attempted it!
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I tend to get carried away. If one verse doesn’t complete the story… I add another. But this form seems to have a different name for the amount of stanza, so you could opt for just one to start with 😉
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I will see how it goes….
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One step at a time…
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yes!
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ooops where you taking about the Tanaga or the Triquain? I was taking about the Triquain.
I’m sure I have another Tanaga somewhere… I’d have to search for it…
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No I was talking about the Triquain.
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I try to have a folder of all the different forms I’ve been introduced to. But there are the tried and true I go back to. Have you seen the Elfje?
While it is just sitting there for a bit my friend has this site to explain the form:
https://simplyelfje.wordpress.com/
What’s not to like about 11 words in five lines. But then a Septolet is nice too.
That’s two stanza split anyway into seven lines with only 14 words.
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Interesting form. I tend to like poetry that flows over poetry specializing on style. Maybe I am still not educated enough yet! LOL
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Stick with what you are comfortable with, then explore. During my teens I had pages (OK books) filled with angst. Be glad you don’t have to go through that stage now 🙂 …hmm, but then the politics of the day might get you anxious… stick with the flow of nature 😉
(Believe me I don’t know enough to know much… I just have a bunch of dented marbles rattling around in my brain!)
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Ha… love the dented marbles in the brain! I do my thing and try not to get too hectic!
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Hey if I can answer half of the Jeopardy questions I’m happy! 🙂 And if I know the answer to the final question – I get up and dance (though that’s not something you’d want to see!).
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Ha Ha! Meee toooo!
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Really when did Alex T get so old? I was just asking my hubby last eve if he remembered Alex’es Afro…
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The d’Verse~Poetry Pub group has pushed me quite a bit in all the different forms they introduce each week.
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So many prompts so little time. I’ve got almost a prompt place for everyday. That’s why sometimes I mash-up or combined prompts.
Continued success with d’verse. 🙂
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I only do two prompts. I like the freedom to put up whatever I want! Follow up on prompts …reading others take s a lot of time.
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Yes, the follow up does take time. But I’m sort of entrenched now at Carrot Ranch flash fiction… I try to return comments to my posts and then just picking and choosing… That’s why I book mark sites rather than follow – I like a cleaner email inbox.
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Thanks Jules. I appreciate your shout out on my site. Tananga seems to work pretty well.
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Are you familiar with the location in this poem?
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Beautiful… ❤
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