I wrote this quadrille this morning, before I knew what our prompt of the day would be on d’Verse. Bjorn suggested that we look at silence in the poetic line and the different ways of marking those breaks. It is know as Caesura, the breathe of the poem. It includes standard punctuation as well as other markings. I went back and put in the silent spaces and pauses in my poem. This is my first attempt at this, so I hope it is what is expected.
Writing Poetry
My words // chosen carefully…
Like stepping on wet rocks
crossing a stream.
Hoping this one // will sustain me
to the next.
I am not interested in a big splash!
Simply making it across
One solid word at a time
Reaching my desired destination.
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Simple but lovely
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Beautiful poem. Strategic and accurate
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I must say, I’ve just begun my journey with WordPress, inspired to write publicly. Not sure quite what to write at the moment so I decided to wander the search bar. This was the first thing I’ve stumbled upon and this is exactly how I’m feeling haha. Wonderful metaphor. Fantastic poem.
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Thank You! Write from your experience if you want to connect.
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Thank you, I appreciate the word of advice
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I’ve always found poetry fascinating. The humor in this one made me giggle, pleasure to read.
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I write a poem
I write it good
With words I know
To make me understood
But my words don’t rhyme
Is this a crime
I abuse my language
I use fake words
For poetic licence
I receive a hefty fine
For stupid prose
I’ll have to do time
I add a pause
A rude word or four
They think I’m a poet
No, they show me the door.
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Beautifully put together.
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Loved it. Keep it up.
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Great metaphor. There is lots to learn about crafting poetry. Just started a legoponics.blog any feedback on my first post much appreciated
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Nice poem
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I liked it a lot. Thanks for sharing.
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Reblogged this on By the Mighty Mumford and commented:
NICE TO FIND ANOTHER GROUP OF POETS AMONG THE ROCKS AND RILLS!
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Thank you so much for reposting this poem.
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good pic~!
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Simple // and to the point.
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Thank You // love your response!!
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Caesuras are my favorite. Thank you for sharing!!!
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Beautiful and purposeful
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What a strong and beautiful text!
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Quite lovely!
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Very well written. You said it was your first time using that form? You did splendid. I love using breaks and punctuation in my poems. I didn’t know the name of it though. Lol I just know how I want my words to be read so I have to make sure I space everything out how it needs to be for other people to hear the sound as well. Great job! 🙂
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Thank you so much for your very kind comments and affirmation of my work. I really appreciate it.
Dwight
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Thank you for reposting my poem!
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Bravo! This is very great
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Gorgeous! Thank you for sharing your heart and soul. I try to do that in my art as well.
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Thank you for your kind words.
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This really struck home for me. I am an outdoor enthusiast as well as a writer. I often find metaphor for my frustrations while out hiking, and it’s nice to see someone else use the inherent imagery so well.
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Thank you for your comments. Nature has a way of inspiring us.
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I know about crossing rivers. When I was young we’d go fishing and have to step on the wet and mossy rocks to get to the spot we knew was a good one to catch fish. I like the line “Simply making it across – One solid word at a time”.
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I like your poem ….
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that was lovely
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Such a wonderful cadence, definitely a successful experiment.
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Thank you so much for you kind words!
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Lovely!
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Beautifully put,
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Yes, one word slips into another. I lovely analogy.
I heard your pauses, I heard your breaks they were fluent yet unheard. Right on cue.
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Thank you for your kind words.
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My friend keep it up
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Thank you. I will try!
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Very nicely done.
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Good stuff! Good rhythm and punctuation make a poem so much better, glad to see you’re paying attention to those aspects. Worked out great!
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Thank you for stopping by my blog. I really thing the added punctuation really makes it work.
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Wonderful!! Thanks for reading!!
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I enjoyed your poetry. Short, meaningful and visual in my mind.
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A great article! Thanks for sharing 🙂
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And the same here as well.
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